The graph below gives information the pcentage of the population in four Asian countries in cities from 1970 to 2020, woth predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the informaton by selecting and reposting the main features, and make complarisons where relevant.

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The line graph compares the proportions of the increased township of four different countries from 1970 to 2020,and that of

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forcasting

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forecasting

amount until 2040.

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,it can be seen that

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all the four nations

would be witnessed

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dramatic

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a dramatic

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increasing in the

communitiy

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community

by 2040,

while

Malaysia will have

been

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obtained that of

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the highest ratio

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throught

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through

throughout

the time period.

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with,in 1970 both the Phillippines and Malaysia bigun with roughly one-third,

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whereas

Indonesia and Thailand stood at just below 20%.

Eventhogh

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fluctuated

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between 1980 and 2010 number of people in the

Philippins

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Philippines

increased nearly by 10,and will have been convicted that, it would

gained

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50% of citizens,which is 20% higher than in 1970.

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,Thailand,which is closely followed by the Phillippines would have

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two-fold of community than 1970,by 2040.

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although

Indonesia had the

least

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percentage in 1970

withapproximately

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with approximately

15%,would have been

forcasted

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forecasted

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to 60% by 2040,which would be the second territory with

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segment.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

154 words

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