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The graph below gives information the pcentage of the population in four Asian countries in cities from 1970 to 2020, woth predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the informaton by selecting and reposting the main features, and make complarisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information the pcentage of the population in four Asian countries in cities from 1970 to 2020, woth predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the informaton by selecting and reposting the main features, and make complarisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares the proportions of the increased township of four different countries from 1970 to 2020,and that of
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forecasting
 amount until 2040.
Overall
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all the four nations
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dramatic
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 increasing in the
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community
 by 2040,
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 Malaysia will have
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obtained that of
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the highest ratio
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throught
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through
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To begin
 with,in 1970 both the Phillippines and Malaysia bigun with roughly one-third,
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whereas
 Indonesia and Thailand stood at just below 20%.
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 between 1980 and 2010 number of people in the
Philippins
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Philippines
 increased nearly by 10,and will have been convicted that, it would
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 50% of citizens,which is 20% higher than in 1970.
Furthermore
,Thailand,which is closely followed by the Phillippines would have
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 two-fold of community than 1970,by 2040.
In contrast
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although
 Indonesia had the
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 percentage in 1970
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with approximately
 15%,would have been
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forecasted
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 to 60% by 2040,which would be the second territory with
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 segment.
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