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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their childen to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life.  To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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For the better development of children, parents enter their children into
schools
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 which helps them in the future to achieve goals and success. But, these days, school options have become a debatable issue for parents because some think single-sex places are not good
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 others oppose
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. I totally agree with the former statement which will be discussed with some points and appropriate examples in the following paragraphs in brief. There are a few reasons which help to explain the importance of co-educational
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 gender quality is the main advantage of studying
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 together. If peers
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 with all genders under one floor
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 it can erase the discrimination between genders difference which would teach them how to survive in society.
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, fewer students are in one-sex
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 than both genders . In large groups of people, they adopt various skills like communication skills and will respect their opposite gender.
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, giving a speech and doing group activities in class helps to boost confidence levels.
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 would make them strong and prepare them for
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 life.
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, on the other side, single-gender
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 are best for girls and boys.
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 other people, students do
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 with more concentration and achieve good marks.
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, they can get admission to their favourite universities and get jobs. In conclusion, no doubt, focus on the
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 is the main factor during schooling time but we cannot ignore other positive skills which are necessary these days.
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Make sure to clarify your argument and stand more distinctly in the introduction. The essay somewhat goes back and forth between the advantages of co-educational and single-gender schools.
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Provide more specific examples to strengthen your arguments, illustrating points with real-world situations or statistics if possible.
coherence cohesion
Ensure clear logical connections between paragraphs to better enhance the flow. Consider using linking words and phrases to improve the transition between ideas and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion clearly introduce the topic and summarize the main points discussed.
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You addressed both sides of the argument, discussing the pros of both co-educational and single-sex schools. This shows a balanced view.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • single-sex schools
  • co-educational schools
  • gender stereotypes
  • social interaction
  • communication skills
  • academic performance
  • mixed-gender environments
  • real-world situations
  • adaptability
  • diversity and inclusivity
  • employment expectations
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