The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pie charts below display the most popular positives and negatives of
the
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Brown
island
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,provided by a survey of visitors.
Overall
,it appears that the high cost of living on the brown
island
is the biggest downside to visitors,
whereas
both the people and the scenery are the most popular
advantage
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according to
them .
According to
the data ,
it is clear that
living on the
island
is not cost-friendly because 50% of visitors reported that it is the biggest disadvantage , followed by entertainment with approximately a quarter of the chart , the
last
two are weather and food quality with 25%.
On the other hand
, there are the advantages with the biggest advantage being the people of
the
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Brown
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with almost half,
while
the scenery comes second with 35%,
finally
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culture and good accommodations which combined take up 23% of the answers.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • According to the survey
  • Visitors reported
  • The pie charts show
  • The most common advantages/disadvantages
  • A significant proportion
  • A small percentage
  • In contrast
  • Notably
  • The largest segment
  • Similarly
  • On the other hand
  • A major advantage/disadvantage
  • To highlight
  • Overall effect
  • Impact the experience
  • In summary
  • Illustrates
  • Reflects
  • Highlights
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