The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals I different parts of the world. Sumarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The line graph illustrates international tourist arrivals based on data which was provided by
United
Nations World Tourism Organization in 2008 for North Correct article usage
the United
America
, Central and Eastern Europe
, South-East Asia, Sub-Saharian Africa and South America
from 1990 to 2005. Additionally
, vertical
axis shows us 0-100 Add an article
the vertical
millions
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million
of
tourist arrivals
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apply
In
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Overall
overall
, there was steady
increase of number foreign Add an article
a steady
visitors
for all 5 different parts of the world. However
, North America
was popular throughout of
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apply
15 years
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the 15-year
period
. In Correct your spelling
contrast
conrast
, Correct your spelling
contrast
Sub-Saharian
Africa and South Correct your spelling
Sub-Saharan
America
,
had Remove the comma
apply
less
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fewer
visitors
than others. Also
, Central and Eastern Europe
, South-East
Asia have risen from the Correct word choice
and South-East
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beginning
begining
up to the end of 2005
With regard to, North Correct your spelling
beginning
America
had around 70 millions
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million
of
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apply
visitors
in 1990, it was risen up to 2000 with numbers 90 figures, however
after 2000 it is
started to decline Unnecessary verb
apply
unsignificantly
up to 2005. Correct your spelling
significantly
As to
compare with less attractive regions, Correct word choice
To
such
as Sub-Saharian
Africa and South Correct your spelling
Saharan
America
number of visitors
were
varied from around 8 Unnecessary verb
apply
millions
up to approximately 16 figures throughout Change to singular
million
of
the Change preposition
apply
15 year
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15-year
period
In
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On
other
hand, Correct article usage
the other
Central
and Eastern Change preposition
in Central
Europe
, Sou th-East
Asia, where numbers of international guests were around 20-30 Correct your spelling
Southeast
millions
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million
in
the beginning of Change the preposition
at
15 year
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the 15-year
period
, at the end
were 80 and 30 millions
by 2005. It is Change to singular
million
Intersting
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Interesting
note
that, Fix the infinitive
to note
the
Central and Eastern Correct article usage
apply
Europe
bacame
popular Correct your spelling
became
at the end
of the period
like North America
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