The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals I different parts of the world. Sumarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals I different parts of the world. 

Sumarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The line graph illustrates international tourist arrivals based on data which was provided by
United
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Nations World Tourism Organization in 2008 for North
America
, Central and Eastern
Europe
, South-East Asia, Sub-Saharian Africa and South
America
from 1990 to 2005.
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,
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axis shows us 0-100
millions
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million
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of
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tourist arrivals
In
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overall
, there was
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increase of number foreign
visitors
for all 5 different parts of the world.
However
, North
America
was popular throughout
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15 years
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the 15-year
period
. In
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contrast
conrast
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contrast
,
Sub-Saharian
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Sub-Saharan
Africa and South
America
,
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had
less
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visitors
than others.
Also
, Central and Eastern
Europe
,
South-East
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and South-East
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Asia have risen from the
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beginning
begining
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beginning
up to the end of 2005 With regard to, North
America
had around 70
millions
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of
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visitors
in 1990, it was risen up to 2000 with numbers 90 figures,
however
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started to decline
unsignificantly
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significantly
up to 2005.
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compare with less attractive regions,
such
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Saharan
Africa and South
America
number of
visitors
were
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varied from around 8
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up to approximately 16 figures throughout
of
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the
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period
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other
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the other
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hand,
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in Central
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and Eastern
Europe
, Sou
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Southeast
Asia, where numbers of international guests were around 20-30
millions
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in
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the beginning of
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the 15-year
period
,
at the end
were 80 and 30
millions
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by 2005. It is
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that,
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Central and Eastern
Europe
bacame
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became
popular
at the end
of the
period
like North
America
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words america, europe, millions, visitors, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international tourist arrivals
  • insight
  • trend
  • significant
  • fluctuation
  • statistic
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • surge
  • data point
  • comparative
  • quantitative analysis
  • economic factor
  • political stability
  • tourism sector
  • global event
  • destination popularity
  • benchmark
  • year-on-year change
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