Governments should spend money on promoting sport and art in school, rather than sponsoring professional sports and art events in communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that the authorities should spend budgets encouraging

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and

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in educational organizations,

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practical

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and

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events in communities should prioritize lesser than

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. From my perspective, It seems convincing that

governments

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should make

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and

art

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in school better since

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with, sponsoring professional

sports

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and

art

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are

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significantly crucial because there are some benefits.

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, places in

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for

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and exhibitions for

art

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could be overcrowded by enthusiasts since it is heavily consumed, and individuals are fond of it. Almost all people want to erase

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burden or stress that

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made in workplaces or

schools

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so they will try to find some entertainment through

sports

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or arts.

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, In Korea, a number of people are directly watching baseball games in

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. They cheer on their team,

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delicious food that can only served there with their friends or acquaintances.

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, they can be recovered from

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stress

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and it leads to improving their abilities in offices or

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.

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, through

these performance

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this performance

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are deeply associated with money. By spending their fund watching

art

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gallery

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or visiting

sport stadium

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, more and more money will be gathered and it will be paid as

a

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apply

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taxes.

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,

governments

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can earn more budgets through these activities, and vulnerable departments

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as environment and education could be invested by the authorities.

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, I am convinced that

governments

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should spend their money improving sport and

art

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in school because

students

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can enhance their performance and it leads to productivity and morale of employees. First of all,

students

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need to be supported by

governments

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.

Students

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tend to

feel

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difficult how to improve their performance so only experts would be hired in

schools

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and they can

facilitate

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help

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students

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be

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better.

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, In Korea, there are some adolescents who want to take part in exhibitions or competitions. It is definitely challenging for

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to enhance, so the government

offer

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them experts and someone won the gold medal in Olymphics.

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,

educaitional

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educational

organizations can make their reputation better and it leads to an increase in the number of

students

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.

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,

schools

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can become a standard of

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good quality

of

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apply

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education and corporations or

governments

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would

be spend

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be spending

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their funding investing

them

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in them

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. In conclusion, the benefits that

students

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become better and

schools

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can make an ethical awareness should not be underestimated.