Governments should spend money on promoting sport and art in school, rather than sponsoring professional sports and art events in communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that the authorities should spend budgets encouraging

sports

and

art

in educational organizations,

while

practical

sports

and

art

events in communities should prioritize lesser than

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the former

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. From my perspective, It seems convincing that

governments

should make

sports

and

art

in school better since

To begin

with, sponsoring professional

sports

and

art

are

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is

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significantly crucial because there are some benefits.

Firstly

, places in

stadium

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stadiums

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for

sports

and exhibitions for

art

could be overcrowded by enthusiasts since it is heavily consumed, and individuals are fond of it. Almost all people want to erase

their

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burden or stress that

are

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is

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made in workplaces or

schools

so they will try to find some entertainment through

sports

or arts.

For example

, In Korea, a number of people are directly watching baseball games in

stadium

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stadiums

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. They cheer on their team,

have

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and have

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delicious food that can only served there with their friends or acquaintances.

As a result

, they can be recovered from

strees

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stress

trees

and it leads to improving their abilities in offices or

schools

.

Secondly

, through

these performance

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this performance

these performances

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are deeply associated with money. By spending their fund watching

art

gallery

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galleries

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or visiting

sport stadium

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sports stadiums

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, more and more money will be gathered and it will be paid as

a

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taxes.

Therefore

,

governments

can earn more budgets through these activities, and vulnerable departments

such

as environment and education could be invested by the authorities.

On the other hand

, I am convinced that

governments

should spend their money improving sport and

art

in school because

students

can enhance their performance and it leads to productivity and morale of employees. First of all,

students

need to be supported by

governments

.

Students

tend to

feel

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difficult how to improve their performance so only experts would be hired in

schools

and they can

facilitate

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help

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students

be

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to be

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better.

For instance

, In Korea, there are some adolescents who want to take part in exhibitions or competitions. It is definitely challenging for

themselves

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them

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to enhance, so the government

offer

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offered

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them experts and someone won the gold medal in Olymphics.

Also

,

educaitional

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educational

organizations can make their reputation better and it leads to an increase in the number of

students

.

Moreover

,

schools

can become a standard of

the

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good quality

of

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apply

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education and corporations or

governments

would

be spend

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be spending

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their funding investing

them

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in them

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. In conclusion, the benefits that

students

become better and

schools

can make an ethical awareness should not be underestimated.