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There is a problem on the road outside your house. Write a letter to your local councilor. In your letter, introduce yourself, explain what the problem is, and tell the councilors what you would like to be done.

#road #house #councilor #councilors
Dear Madam or Sir I hope you find
this
 letter well and are doing well. I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that in front of my
house
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house,
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 there are issues like potholes and
drainage
. Potholes and
drainage
 problems are becoming the result of my loss because whenever I tried to get my bike or car out of my house, the bumper hit the ground and broke
it
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apply
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. And because of
drainage
 every rainy season, lots of water
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is store
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store
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stored
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 in front of the house.Which resulted
as
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in
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 giving birth to many insects which spread
disease
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diseases
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 like fever or cold
as a result
 I have to spend my money on hospital bills. I know you are busy because you have lots of roads or services under you. I just want to solve that issue because it gives me so
pain
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. Can you just fill the potholes with
the
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apply
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mud or cement
.
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?
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 And give a contract to a
drainage
 company to fix the issue. It will be so good if you try to
finish
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solve
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this
 problem before the rainy season. Kind Regards Davinder Singh
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that all sentences have clear punctuation to aid readability and understanding.
Task Achievement
Summarize your main points in a concluding sentence to reinforce your request.
Task Achievement
You clearly introduced yourself and set the context right at the beginning of the letter.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter has a clear and polite greeting and closing, maintaining a courteous tone throughout.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Councilor – an elected representative for a local area who can address community problems.
  • Pothole – a depression or hollow in a road surface showing asphalt degradation.
  • Congestion – overcrowding or traffic blocking efficient movement.
  • Hazard – a danger or risk on the road that needs attention.
  • Resolution – a formal expression of intention or remedy to solve a particular issue.
  • Impact – the effect of a particular action or problem.
  • Community – the people living in an area collectively.
  • Urgency – the need for prompt attention to a pressing issue.
  • Remedy – a means of counteracting or eliminating something undesirable.
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