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Solar energy is becoming popular in many countries of the world because of its availability without any limit. Do the advantages of solar energy outweigh its disadvantages?

#energy #countries #world #availability #limit
Many companies and individuals in various countries opt to use geothermal
energy
 as
source
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 of electricity, light, and power
due to
 its convenience and accessibility. Despite the affectation it can cause
in
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 a specific land,
one
 of the reasons that the benefits outweigh its drawbacks is its cost-effectivity.
To begin
 with, in order to compensate with large
companies
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 usage of electricity and other resources, some establishments need huge fields in order to position plenty of panels. As
result
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,
this
 requires
removal
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 of plants or trees,
moreover
, they need these massive areas to be able to fully light up their large buildings.
For instance
, a construction company which decided to utilize renewable
energy
 as
means
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 of electricity,
they
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need
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 to look for wide areas where they can locate
the
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solar panels.
Therefore
,
one
 of the drawbacks of
this
 approach is the destruction of
environment
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the environment
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 including
plant
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plants
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 and trees.
Conversely
,
one
 of the common advantages of using geothermal power is it can save up considerable amount of money a company or person spends. With
this
, each institution or individual will no longer pay higher bills monthly.
For example
,
one
 household prefers sun
energy
 over the usual because they commonly receive
an increased bills
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 every month.
Thus
,
chossing
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choosing
this
 power will aid them financially by lessening their monthly expenses. In conclusion, the company's usage of
energy
 from the sun can affect certain land because of the need to put down solar panels,
however
, it greatly
provide
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 more positive results
such
 as people saving up finance because of
this
 technique.
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task achievement
Clarify the distinction between solar and geothermal energy in your essay, as the prompt asks about solar energy specifically. Make sure to stay on topic throughout the essay.
task achievement
Develop your ideas further with more specific examples and explanations to strengthen your argument. This will help in making your task achievement more comprehensive.
coherence cohesion
Improve transitions between ideas to enhance the coherence of your essay. Consider using linking words and phrases to better connect your points.
coherence cohesion
Your essay contains a clear introduction and conclusion, outlining your position on the advantages and disadvantages of solar energy.
task achievement
The essay addresses both sides of the argument, discussing both the advantages and disadvantages, which demonstrates a balanced approach.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable
  • inexhaustible
  • renewable energy
  • mitigating
  • initial setup cost
  • long-term savings
  • low maintenance
  • remote and rural areas
  • socio-economic development
  • intermittent
  • storage technologies
  • toxic materials
  • recycling and disposal mechanisms
  • job creation
  • economic growth
  • fossil fuels
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