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Band 6.5

It is not necessary to travel to another because books provided you with same knowledge

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It is undeniable that with the advancement in technology, it become feasible to gain knowledge about any other
country
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while
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 sitting at
your
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home.
However
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, some people consider travelling as an important part of their learning. I fully agree with
this
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 notion
due to
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 the reasons explained in the following paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, there are several reasons why travel is not necessary for collecting information about any
country
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.
Firstly
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, it helps people in saving their time because books provide them with the flexibility that they can access at any time and give them data related to the nation even without visiting a place.
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, watching movies about the
country
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 provides people with great insights regarding their eating habits, culture, and clothing which saves them a hefty amount as it is so true that going to any
country
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 requires
you
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apply
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a lot of things
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 as a visa, money, and ticket and that costs a lot.
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, for an average earner, it is so hard to spend that much.
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, reading and films are the best sources for getting information without spending your money and time on them.
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, apart from all that it allows individuals to explore different traditions from the comfort of their homes since digital media become so advanced that we can go through a wide range of content
while
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 staying at home.
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, documentaries, online courses, and virtual tours are so informative
as well as
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 cost-effective.
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, experiencing culture via travel can lead to personal growth and a more meaningful understanding of subtleties.
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, it still costs a fortune to the middle-class person.
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, my aunt was the one
loved
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who loved
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 travelling, she was so fond of it that she did not even care how much was she spending.
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, she
end
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 up getting a loan now even for basic amenities.
To conclude
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,
although
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 exploring a
country
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 gives you proper data regarding a place, learning about that on the Internet is money-saving.

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task achievement
To achieve a better task response, ensure that each argument directly addresses the topic and explores different dimensions of both sides of the argument.
coherence cohesion
Work on creating seamless transitions between ideas to enhance coherence.
task achievement
Your introduction clearly outlines the topic and your stance, setting a strong foundation for the essay.
coherence cohesion
The essay maintains a clear structure with paragraphs dedicated to specific points, making it easy to follow.
task achievement
The use of examples, like your aunt's story, effectively supports your arguments.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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