Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued by many
people
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that
professionals
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should
work
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in the
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country
that studied there
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others believe they have to be free to choose where
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they want to
work
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. Personally, I tend to agree with the second view and propose some examples. There is a common belief that educated
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should
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in the
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that they studied there and the reason is that they have studied in that environment and resources from that
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have
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for them to become
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and in
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they should
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there as a
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commitment
.
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to
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, they
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believe that
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are
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crucial
for the development of the
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and the benefit should be for that nation.
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, some individuals have different
view
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views
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. They believe that
people
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should have the freedom of choice to
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in any
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that has
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and
suitable
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environment to
work
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they have trained in their
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but
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there might not be a proper situation to
work
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in that
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. It seems to me that, the
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situation of the
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plays an important role for
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to choose whether
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work
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where they have been trained or another
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with higher compensation and better quality of life. In conclusion, it is believed by many that the benefit of the
professionals
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should be for the
country
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that they have trained there.
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, others believe they should have the freedom to choose where
do
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they want to
work
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. Personally, I believe
people
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should
work
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in a
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that
have
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better
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a better
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situation and quality of life.
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task achievement
Ensure all ideas are developed with relevant examples to support your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Use varied cohesive devices to enhance the flow of ideas across paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Double-check for minor spelling errors, such as 'counrty' should be 'country' and 'comitment' should be 'commitment' to improve clarity.
task achievement
The essay includes a clear introduction that outlines both views and states the writer's opinion.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the writer’s opinion, reinforcing the main points discussed.
coherence cohesion
Paragraphs are well-structured, each presenting distinct ideas and arguments.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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