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Some believe that advances in technology are increasing the gap between rich and poor, while others think the opposite is happening. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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In the modern world, technology is rapidly developing, having both positive and negative impacts on society. Lately, many
people
 have been arguing about the division of
people
 into the impoverished and wealthy by technological advances, some agree with the statement,
while
 others do not. To my mind,
this
 is faithful because modern machinery is not available to the whole society: both rich and poor, and
this
 has actually widened the difference between them.
According to
 the positive opinions, the gap between the rich and the poor is low because nowadays technologies shorten the difference
due to
 equal opportunities. In the present times, various
people
 have access to devices that they can use for learning or earning money.
For example
, anyone can start learning online courses or start an online business without leaving home.
Nevertheless
, others believe that
such
 technologies expand the space among humans of different income levels.
This
 opinion occurred
due to
 various financial abilities. To exemplify, low-income persons can not afford expensive gadgets for appropriate education.
As a result
,
such
 conditions limit employment. In my opinion, the problem is relevant because
people
 with different incomes do not have similar access to machinery and conveniences.
Therefore
,
this
 has led to an increase in the gap between the rich and the poor.
Moreover
,
this
 problem continues to develop and allows the wealthy to have
the
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power in the future.
To sum up
, technology certainly has a positive effect, but still has a very negative impact on society, widening the differences among
people
.
However
,
one
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 way or another, opportunities are given to everyone and the way humans live is revolutionised.
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task achievement
Provide more specific examples to illustrate the points about technology widening or narrowing the gap between rich and poor.
coherence cohesion
Ensure smooth transitions between opposing viewpoints and your opinion for better coherence.
introduction conclusion present
Your introduction clearly sets the premise for the discussion, stating both sides and providing your opinion.
task achievement
The essay effectively covers both perspectives and provides a fair opinion.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion efficiently wraps up the discussion with a personal stance and acknowledges both sides.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advances in technology
  • gap between rich and poor
  • economic inequality
  • access to technology
  • competitive edge
  • job displacement
  • automation
  • impoverished areas
  • technological innovations
  • new job opportunities
  • internet connectivity
  • access to information
  • empower
  • educate
  • disadvantaged backgrounds
  • mobile banking
  • financial inclusion
  • education technology
  • equal learning opportunities
  • exacerbate
  • alleviate
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