IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The graph below shows information about the kinds of food that teenagers in Australia enjoyed eating. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows information about the kinds of food that teenagers in Australia enjoyed eating. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The Line chart illustrates information about the kinds of
food
Use synonyms
 that teenagers in Australia
enjoyed
Wrong verb form
enjoy
show examples
 eating.
Overall
Linking Words
, the three categories experienced different trends in the time period, Despite
thes
Correct your spelling
this
, it is crystal clear,
the
Correct your spelling
that
show examples
 Hamburgers were the
highst
Correct your spelling
highest
 in the
last
Linking Words
 year, in
opposite
Correct article usage
the opposite
show examples
 way Fish and Chips were the lowest number of times eaten per year. As the graph shows, people of teenagers who
take
Verb problem
eat
show examples
 Pizza and Hamburgers almost begin
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
2,
While
Linking Words
who
Correct pronoun usage
those who
show examples
take
Verb problem
eat
show examples
 Fish and chips started
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
 100 youngest in 1975, Regarding Fish and chips were
decline steady
Replace the word
declined steadily
show examples
 until
it
Correct pronoun usage
they
show examples
 fell over 39,
on the other hand
Linking Words
 the two special
food
Use synonyms
 in Australian were sharply increased
then
Linking Words
 steady remained, about Humburgars were 100 of person
furthermore
Linking Words
 Pizza almost 83 teenagers. In
conclusion
Add a comma
conclusion,
show examples
 I recommended families
to
Fix the infinitive
apply
show examples
take for their children healthy
food
Use synonyms
due to
Linking Words
 their bodies,
by
Change preposition
apply
show examples
constrat
Correct your spelling
contrast
 the chart viewed the importance eat and delicious
food
Use synonyms
 for
Add an article
the minor
a minor
show examples
minor
Fix the agreement mistake
minors
show examples
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • preference
  • frequency
  • trend
  • popularity
  • notably
  • anomaly
  • dominant
  • contrast
  • exhibit
  • proportion
  • category
  • significant
  • rate
  • margin
  • predominant
  • marginally
  • substantial
  • consistent
  • overall
  • variety
What to do next:
Look at other essays: