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The tables provide information about the sales

The tables provide information about the sales
The tables provide information about the
sales
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 of
fair-trade
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coffee
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 and
bananas
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 in five European
countries
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 (
UK
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,
Switzerland
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, Denmark,
Belgium
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, and
Sweden
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) in 1999 and 2004. The data is measured in millions of
euros
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 and shows changes in consumption over the five-year period. It is evident that
sales
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 of both
fair-trade
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coffee
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 and
bananas
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 increased significantly in most
countries
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 over the period. The
UK
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 experienced the most substantial rise in
coffee
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sales
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,
while
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Switzerland
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 recorded the highest
growth
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 in banana
sales
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.
However
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, not all
countries
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 showed significant increases, as some had only marginal changes. Regarding
fair-trade
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coffee
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,
sales
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 increased in all five
countries
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 between 1999 and 2004. The
UK
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 saw a dramatic rise from 1.5
million
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euros
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 in 1999 to 20
million
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euros
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 in 2004, the highest increase among the
countries
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.
Switzerland
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also
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 experienced
growth
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, with
sales
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 rising from 3
million
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euros
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 to 6
million
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euros
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. Denmark and
Belgium
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 showed modest
growth
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, with figures increasing from 1.8 to 2
million
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euros
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 and from 1 to 1.7
million
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euros
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, respectively.
Sweden
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 had the smallest rise, with
sales
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 growing slightly from 0.8
million
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euros
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 to 1
million
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euros
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. For
fair-trade
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bananas
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,
Switzerland
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 dominated the market in both years, with
sales
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 rising significantly from 15
million
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euros
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 in 1999 to 47
million
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euros
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 in 2004. The
UK
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 followed, experiencing a notable increase from 1
million
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euros
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 to 5.5
million
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euros
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. Denmark
also
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 showed
growth
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, with
sales
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 increasing from 0.6 to 4
million
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euros
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.
However
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,
Belgium
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 and
Sweden
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 displayed contrasting trends. In
Belgium
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,
sales
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 of
bananas
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 remained relatively stable, rising only from 1.8 to 2
million
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euros
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.
In contrast
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,
Sweden
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 experienced a decline, with
sales
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 dropping from 1
million
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euros
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 to 0.9
million
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euros
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, fair-trade, coffee, bananas, countries, uk, switzerland, belgium, sweden, euros, growth, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provide" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
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