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Teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their communities. This is good foe the individuals concerned and society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree with htis view? Discuss, based on your own knowledge and experience.

These days young people are more active in academics and play a significant contribution to building up a healthy society. Though their primary role is to study solely, they are involved in many social activities.
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, some people believe that sending young children to different unpaid works in their society must be required. Because they think it is a healthy practice for increasing their extracurricular involvement.
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, I strongly disagree with the statement and believe that
students
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 should focus on study and research for the welfare of society and the country.
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 with, the primary duty of a student is to concentrate on his/her study. To acquire knowledge, they have to spend enough time in educational institutes, libraries, or homes, where they can get a proper environment.
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, every undergraduate has to face a number of exams in their schools or colleges.
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, they always have a hectic schedule in their life.
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, at Sher-e-Bangla Agricultural University, every student in the Veterinary department has to appear in at least 47 class tests in a 6-month semester.
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, they need to do many assignments, lab experiments, presentations, and writing practical notebooks.
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, they could not get any extra time for doing other chores in their household let alone social work. When a student joins a volunteering group or charity group, he/she has to do a lot of duties and training, which may create an extra workload for anyone. Sometimes these groups send them to a distant location for various training, which costs a number of leave from their schools or colleges.
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, these
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 have faced critical situations resulting a bad grades on their exams.
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, the Scout club is a volunteering group at Dhaka University, Bangladesh that takes members in every year and every member must do training at their camp for 3-5 days.
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 who want to be members go there by applying for a leave from educational institutions.
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, these
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 miss their classes including theoretical and practical leading to a poor understanding of these subjects in future.
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 unpaid activity develops a lot of
skills
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 including leadership, organizing abilities, facing hardship, and so on, it hampers the main focus of
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.
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, these
skills
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 can be developed by arranging academic scientific seminars, and conferences, and providing speeches in any function of institutes. If an institute arranges a scientific seminar by involving young energetic
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, they can develop their
skills
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 in academics, research, and volunteering
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.
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, from the institutions,
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 can learn a wide range of
skills
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 which focus on education including leading a debate club, language club, and cultural programs in their premises.
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, charity unpaid work should not be obligated as
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 have to do a number of classes, preparing themselves for their final tests, and the extracurricular activities will be learned by arranging different educational programs in their respective institutes.

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Coherence and Cohesion
The concluding paragraph effectively summarizes your position but can reiterate more specific evidence or examples provided in the essay to strengthen its impact.
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Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are effectively structured, setting up your thesis and summarizing your position clearly.
Task Achievement
There's a comprehensive response to the task question, addressing both individual and societal perspectives of teenagers doing unpaid work.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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