Wild animals have no use in the 21st century and trying to preserve animals now is just wastage of money. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In
this
day and age, wild
animals
have no
use
and
effort
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the effort
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to preserve
animals
is
waste
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a waste
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of
money
. From my personal
perspective
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I agree to a certain extent with
statement
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the statement
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given,
however
there are some
issuees
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issues
to consider. Both sides will be examined in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, it is undeniable that there are numerous
benefits
of spending
money
to preserve wild
animals
nowaday
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nowadays
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. The primary and most crucial one is that wild
anmials
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animal
protectors have higher incomes to support
preserve
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preservation
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projects.
In other words
, wild
animals
have no
use
but
a
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number of wild
animals
is a significant decline from several
problem
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problems
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, so protectors can
use
money
to solve
this
issue. Another advantage is that wild
animals
are
contibutors
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contributors
to
control
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the environmental
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environmental
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environment
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.
This
is
due to
the fact that we do not have better knowledge about how to preserve forest
animals
, if we stop
spend
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spending
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money
to enhance information to preserve, it can lead to environmental
issue
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issues
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. Experts,
for instance
,
use
money
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the money
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to support
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a project
the project
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project
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projects
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to save wild
anmials
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animals
from fire
forest
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forests
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.
On the contrary
,
although
there are several
favorable
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aspects, a number of
benefits
should
well-considered
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of stop spending
money
to preserve. The initial and most obvious one is that people can
use
money
from
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to
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protect
animals
to
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from
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other parts that
more
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are more
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neccessary
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necessary
.
For example
, the government have higher incomes to improve infrastructure for individuals to get
better
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a better
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life. Encouraging
better
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a better
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wild
environmental
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environment
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is the
last
positive to be taken into account.
For
this
reason, when people stop
waste
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wasting
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money
to preserve people who want to
use
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preserve wild
animals
to make
money
cannot have
medhod
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method
on the grounds that it can improve
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the ethical
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ethical
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of
those person
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. In conclusion, even though there are numerous
benefits
associated stop
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the wastage
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wastage
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of
money
to preserve, I hold the view that the
benefits
of spending
money
to preserve wild
animals
outweigh them. If individuals spend
money
to support, it is almost certain they can reduce a dead number of
wild
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dead
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animals
.
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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and logical structure, make sure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. Use linking words like 'furthermore,' 'on the other hand,' and 'additionally' to guide your reader through your argument.
task achievement
Increase the support for your main points by providing detailed and specific examples where possible. For example, if discussing the economic benefits of protecting wildlife, give a specific instance of a successful preservation project.
task achievement
Try to develop your ideas more fully. For instance, when you mention the role of wild animals in controlling the environment, explain this role in detail and provide some examples or case studies.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which contributes to a better overall structure.
task achievement
The essay identifies multiple perspectives and attempts to discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of spending money on wild animal preservation.

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