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The given line graph illustrates the admission for five hospitals in a week in a European country form the year 2004 to 2018.

The given line graph illustrates the admission for five hospitals in a week in a European country form the year 2004 to 2018.
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The given line chart illustrates the
admissions
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 of five hospitals in a European country from the year 2004 to 2018.
Overall
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, the
admissions
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 for Bradley Hospital and Adlin Hospital experienced
increase
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,
while
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 the
admissions
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 for Oxley Hospital decreased. Stanton Hospital and Fortsmith Hospital experienced fluctuation. In 2004, 200
patients
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 were admitted
in
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to
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 Bradley Hospital, and
then
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 it experienced a gradual increase with a slight decrease. It reached
at
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its peak in 2018, which
were
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was
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 255 patient
admissions
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 per
week
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. In Adlin Hospital, in 2004, 130
patients
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 were admitted, and it experienced a gradual increase
and
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in 2018, it reached
at
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250
patients
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admissions
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 per
week
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.
However
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, the
admissions
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 of Oxley Hospital decreased, which started from 240 patient
admissions
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 per
week
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 and it experienced a decline which was 110 patient
admissions
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 per
week
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. In terms of
Franton
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Fronton
 Hospital, around 180
patients
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 were admitted per
week
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, and it experienced fluctuations
and
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in 2018, around 200
patients
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admitted
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were admitted
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 in a
week
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words admissions, patients, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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