The given line graph illustrates the admission for five hospitals in a week in a European country form the year 2004 to 2018.

The given line graph illustrates the admission for five hospitals in a week in a European country form the year 2004 to 2018.
The given line chart illustrates the
admissions
of five hospitals in a European country from the year 2004 to 2018.
Overall
, the
admissions
for Bradley Hospital and Adlin Hospital experienced
increase
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,
while
the
admissions
for Oxley Hospital decreased. Stanton Hospital and Fortsmith Hospital experienced fluctuation. In 2004, 200
patients
were admitted
in
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Bradley Hospital, and
then
it experienced a gradual increase with a slight decrease. It reached
at
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its peak in 2018, which
were
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255 patient
admissions
per
week
. In Adlin Hospital, in 2004, 130
patients
were admitted, and it experienced a gradual increase
and
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in 2018, it reached
at
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250
patients
admissions
per
week
.
However
, the
admissions
of Oxley Hospital decreased, which started from 240 patient
admissions
per
week
and it experienced a decline which was 110 patient
admissions
per
week
. In terms of
Franton
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Fronton
Hospital, around 180
patients
were admitted per
week
, and it experienced fluctuations
and
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in 2018, around 200
patients
admitted
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in a
week
.
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