A friend had a new born baby, you have picked up a present for the baby and want to visit to give it to him / her. Write a letter to – - Congratulate your friend. - Tell him why you picked up the mentioned present. - Suggest arrangements for the visit.
Dear Nina,
Congratulations on your new baby. I am very happy for you. Your child
so
lucky Add a missing verb
is so
because
to have a mother like you. You are Correct word choice
apply
good
friend I Add an article
a good
really
so lucky because I have a great friend.
I know you do not like a gift because I want Add a missing verb
am really
to
a toy house for your child. Change preposition
apply
This
toy house Linking Words
do
not use Change the verb form
does
a
now but ıf she is grown up she Correct article usage
apply
is play
Change the verb form
is playing
Change preposition
with a
a
toy house.
I am very busy now because I working abroad and I do not Correct article usage
the
enough
Add a missing verb
have enough
time
Use synonyms
for visiting
you. I do not want to come at rush Change preposition
to visit
time
. I want to come at a comfortable Use synonyms
time
because I want to more spend Use synonyms
time
Use synonyms
for
your child.
I want to come Change preposition
with
you
as soon as possible and spend Change preposition
to you
time
with you. Maybe I Use synonyms
came
back next month. If you are available I want to stay with you for one or two days
Best regards.Wrong verb form
will come
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single main idea to enhance clarity.
task achievement
Include more specific details about the gift to better explain your reasons for choosing it.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are well-structured and polite.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is warm and friendly, appropriate for writing to a friend.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite