A friend had a new born baby, you have picked up a present for the baby and want to visit to give it to him / her. Write a letter to – - Congratulate your friend. - Tell him why you picked up the mentioned present. - Suggest arrangements for the visit.

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Dear Nina, Congratulations on your new baby. I am very happy for you. Your child
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lucky
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to have a mother like you. You are
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friend I
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so lucky because I have a great friend. I know you do not like a gift because I want
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a toy house for your child.
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toy house
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not use
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now but ıf she is grown up she
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a
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toy house. I am very busy now because I working abroad and I do not
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time
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for visiting
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you. I do not want to come at rush
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. I want to come at a comfortable
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because I want to more spend
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your child. I want to come
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as soon as possible and spend
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with you. Maybe I
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back next month. If you are available I want to stay with you for one or two days Best regards.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single main idea to enhance clarity.
task achievement
Include more specific details about the gift to better explain your reasons for choosing it.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are well-structured and polite.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is warm and friendly, appropriate for writing to a friend.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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