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More and more people today want to own famous brands of clothes, cars and other items. What are the reasons for this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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These days, the number of
people
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 who follow special
items
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such
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 as clothes, vehicles, and so on who have famous
brands
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 is increasing.
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 essay discusses the main reasons for
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 happening ,and about a phenomenon
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 good or bad .
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 evidence like the other ones has a range of reasons like social media and celebrities. On the one hand, the luxurious and popular
brands
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 have some advertisements on social media;
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, the
people
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 who follow them like to have these
items
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 owing to the fact that they want to have and use the trends tools.
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, a lot of populations who are fans of celebrities and influencers want to look the same as them so they like to buy the
items
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 that they wear.
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, when an actor wears a particular brand of shoes;
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, the figure of selling the shoes that he wears will climb. In my opinion, unfortunately,
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 is a negative development that has a majority of bad effects on the environment inasmuch as when the number of communities who use the
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' goods rises, these companies need to produce more products.
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, increasing the number of products requires climbing the sectors of factories, which destroys forests, and uses a lot of ingredients;
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, if the models of fashion alter, communities throw out their
last
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items
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 to buy new ones; in fact, they injure their surroundings.
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, it is important that publicities and famous
people
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 have a lot of influence on
people
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's lifestyles to spend their money on
brands
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' goods;
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, these products impact the environment.
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