You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Organized tours to remote community and other countries are increasingly popular. Is it a positive or negative development for the local people and environment? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Tourism plays a vital role
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development in many countries.
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,
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incredibly increasing
demand
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it has
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positive
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affects
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effects
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on both local residents and
environment
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the environment
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.
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,
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on both
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. It is inevitable to say that tourism doesn't support
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growth of countries.
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, it is noteworthy that in
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era
people
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love enjoying and exploring different countries which has reached
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. Looking forward to many organisations tour had became
simpler
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the simpler
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choice for travel.
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, it was noted by one of the
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that a country named
dubai
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, grew up its economy from
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to
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by allowing more and more tourists . They
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promoted tourism events held by tour
ocmpanies
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companies
to local
people
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and
vistors
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visitors
from outside
country
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the country
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which ultimately gave importance
that
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how much it was important to them. Building on
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idea another critical reason was noteworthy,
raising
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of tourists
also
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affected many locals and created
choas
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chaos
around the city making
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enviroment
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environment
.
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makes crowd noise which ultimately affects
people
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such
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as old
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people
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health. Considering another example, some reporters in
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also
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noted
a
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similar damage
on
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environment
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the environment
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.
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as ,they captured
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around the city and damaged monuments .
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was all
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resulted
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due
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to uneducated public from
out
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outside
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side
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. So that was the consideration which
remaind uncoverd
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remained uncovered
and unsolved by
government
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the government
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of that country .
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demonstrates that , as every coin has its flip
side
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we should always consider both
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side
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. Positive effects and negative effects must
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in
such
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that must
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proper solutions.
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Grammar
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Examples
Introduce more relevant examples to strengthen your arguments.
Structure
Ensure all points are clearly supported and logically connected to enhance the flow of your essay.
Content
The essay presents a balanced view, considering both the positive and negative impacts of tourism.
Structure
The introduction and conclusion are present and frame the essay nicely.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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