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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
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The
map
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 provides information about the direction of entrance to the city hospital over the period 3 years from 2007 and 2010.
It is clear that
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 three years later , no changes were made to the location of the hospital building. Notably, additional features
such
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 as bus
stop
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stops
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,
roundabout
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roundabouts
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, and car parks were introduced in the 2010
map
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. In detail, in 2007
hospital's
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the hospital's
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road
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 which placed busses stop
in
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on
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 both sides was demolished to make
bigger
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a bigger
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 feature for
bus
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the bus
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 station centre.
Car
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The car
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 park where placed
in
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apply
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eastward for
staffs
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staff
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 and
public
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the public
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 was extended only staff member cars ,
however
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 public
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also
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was also
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 built to
Eastern
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the Eastern
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 side of
hospital
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the hospital
a hospital
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 building in the second
map
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. In 2010,
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road
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the road
a road
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 of
hospital
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the hospital
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 was developed to roundabout to the location city hospital. Looking at the
map
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 which remained building in both years 2007 and 2010.
At the
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The
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 middle hospital which surrounded by
ring
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a ring
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road
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 was
remain
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remained
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 unchanged with
city
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the city
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road
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 at the bottom of the
map
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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