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The Maps below show the paradise Island in past and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The Maps below show the paradise Island in past and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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Here, the maps
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the huge difference
in
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between
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the
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apply
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paradise Island in
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the previos
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previos
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previous
 and
present
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the present
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.
Overall
, it is worth noticing
fact
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the fact
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 that in recent
due to
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apply
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development deforestation
raises
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has risen
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. At a fleeting glance in past there
was
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were
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 only
few
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a few
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 entertainment sorts
now
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now,
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 there were
plethora
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a plethora
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entertainment
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of entertainment
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area
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areas
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build
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built
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. There was
natural
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a natural
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 spring
Iin
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in
past
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the past
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 which was now in
small
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a small
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 different
area
. There was
scientific
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a scientific
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 research station and
few
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a few
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 coconut
tress
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trees
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 which not shown in present in the
paradise
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Paradise
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 Island.
Further
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Further,
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anyalis
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analysis
 of maps demonstrate that today's development
was did
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was done
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 for tourists and constructed plenty of things for
rejuvenate
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rejuvenation
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.Pier
now
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is now
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 reconstructed and made big before it was.The best development is in
present
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the present
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 hotel complex
along with
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a swimmingpool
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swimmingpool
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swimming pool
. For foody person now there
was
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is
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open
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an open
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 restaurant where they can enjoy their favourite food with
best
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the best
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 view and not only
this
 but there is
BBQ
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a BBQ
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area
 cafe and now one more thing added
cycle
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a cycle
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 path.
Beach
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The beach
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 was
same
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the same
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 as in past but
in
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at
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present
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present,
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 there
was
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is
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 some
area
specially
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especially
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 for swimming
permitted
Verb problem
apply
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.
Boat
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The boat
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now
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was now
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 converted
in
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into
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cruise
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a cruise
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 ship
as well as
 rocks were not changed.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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