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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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Two maps of a public central
library
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 illustrate the floor strategy which
are
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is
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 20
years
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 ago and the present time. There are many differences between the figures
of
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for
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 20
years
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. First of all, there were two tables and chairs in the middle of
central
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the central
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library
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 20
years
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 ago,
whereas
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, there aren't 2 sets of tables and chairs now.
Additionally
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,
the
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on the
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 left upside of the
library
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,
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adult
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the adult
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 fiction
books
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 section which was located
in
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on
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 the left side of
central
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the central
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libray
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library
 changed to
all
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the all
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 reference
books
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 section.
Besides
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,
media
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the media
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room
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 which
included
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includes
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 CDs,videos,
computer
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and computer
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 games arranged
to
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in
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 the reading
room
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 for children's fiction
books
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room
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 whose purpose
to
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was to
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 hold
the
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apply
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storytelling events. And the reading
room
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 which was left
down side
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downside
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 in the
library
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 in the past. After 20
years
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, there is the computer
room
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 whose location is
same
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the same
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 as the location of the reading
room
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 20
years
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 ago. 20
years
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 ago, the children's book spot was
in
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on
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 the right
upside
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side
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 of the
library
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,
however
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, it changed to the lecture
room
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.
And
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Also
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also
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adult
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non-fictioin
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non-fiction
books
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 corner changed to
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adult
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an adult
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fictioin
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fiction
books
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 part and there are
information
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an information
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 desk and self-service machines.
In addition
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, the enquiry desk whose purpose for tickets, book returns,
and
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apply
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 etc, was located in the right corner of the
library
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 20
years
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 ago. But now, the location of
enquiry
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the enquiry
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 desk
is
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has
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 changed to the place of
cafe
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the cafe
a cafe
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.
Therefore
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, there is the movement of
neccessary
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necessary
 places in the public
library
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,
for example
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,
adult
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 fiction
books
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, all reference
books
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, tables & chairs, and more.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, years, adult, books, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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