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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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Two maps of a public central
library
 illustrate the floor strategy which
are
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is
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 20
years
 ago and the present time. There are many differences between the figures
of
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for
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 20
years
. First of all, there were two tables and chairs in the middle of
central
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the central
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library
 20
years
 ago,
whereas
, there aren't 2 sets of tables and chairs now.
Additionally
,
the
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on the
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 left upside of the
library
,
adult
Correct article usage
the adult
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 fiction
books
 section which was located
in
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on
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 the left side of
central
Correct article usage
the central
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libray
Correct your spelling
library
 changed to
all
Correct article usage
the all
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 reference
books
 section.
Besides
,
media
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the media
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room
 which
included
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includes
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 CDs,videos,
computer
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and computer
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 games arranged
to
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in
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 the reading
room
 for children's fiction
books
room
 whose purpose
to
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was to
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 hold
the
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apply
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storytelling events. And the reading
room
 which was left
down side
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downside
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 in the
library
 in the past. After 20
years
, there is the computer
room
 whose location is
same
Correct article usage
the same
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 as the location of the reading
room
 20
years
 ago. 20
years
 ago, the children's book spot was
in
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on
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 the right
upside
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side
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 of the
library
,
however
, it changed to the lecture
room
.
And
Correct word choice
Also
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also
adult
non-fictioin
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non-fiction
books
 corner changed to
adult
Correct article usage
an adult
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fictioin
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fiction
books
 part and there are
information
Correct article usage
an information
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 desk and self-service machines.
In addition
, the enquiry desk whose purpose for tickets, book returns,
and
Correct word choice
apply
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 etc, was located in the right corner of the
library
 20
years
 ago. But now, the location of
enquiry
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the enquiry
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 desk
is
Verb problem
has
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 changed to the place of
cafe
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the cafe
a cafe
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.
Therefore
, there is the movement of
neccessary
Correct your spelling
necessary
 places in the public
library
,
for example
,
adult
 fiction
books
, all reference
books
, tables & chairs, and more.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, years, adult, books, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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