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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Panama City from 2010 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Panama City from 2010 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided line graph illustrates the data about the trend of three different crimes (burglary, car theft,
robbery
) in Panama
city
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 from 2010 to 2019.
Overall
, the number of
burglary
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burglaries
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 has declined over the period.
In contrast
,the
diffrence
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difference
 between 2010 and 2019,was relatively unchanged in both car theft and
robbery
.
Additionaly
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Additionally
,
robbery
was
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had
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 the least number of
incedents
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incidents
 all the time. In considering the trend of burglary rose
at
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to
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 its highest point
about
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of about
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 3750 incidents over one year period from 2010
then
gradual
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a gradual
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 decline in
next
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the next
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 4 years and reached the lowest point which was around 1000 cases
then
 inclined slowly in
next
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the next
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 year and after a few up and downs it settled just below 1500. The number of incidents of
robbery
 started
around
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at around
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 700 cases in 2010 and
the a
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a
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 few
fluccuations
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fluctuations
fluctuation
 can be evident from 2010 to 2019 and
finally
 settled at the same point
around
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at around
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 700
insidents
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incidents
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words robbery with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Crime rates
  • Fluctuated
  • Significant spike
  • Consistent trend
  • Prevalent
  • Cumulative change
  • Enforcement
  • Correlate
  • Reduction/increase in crime
  • Categories of crime
  • Level of crime
  • Period of time
  • Analysis
  • Data representation
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