You should spend about 40 min on this task. Write about the following topic: More people are aducating themselves with online educational sources. Do the advantages overweigh the disadvantages.

Each year, a large number of educational
sources
. first of all, one of the most obvious
advatages
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advantages
advantage
of educational
sources
. Nowadays most
of
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the
people
use
internet
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and
computer
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computers
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for work and for
other
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themselves.Computers for
using
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use
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is
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are
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comfortable and
people
can give computer in
the
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their
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bag. And use
usully
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usually
when
its
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it is
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necessary.
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example
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in online educational
sources
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there
are
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more information than
traditional
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in traditional
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book
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books
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or in
study
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which teach us
people
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, people
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. they can not
gives
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other necessary information
in
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that time for
people
. In online educational
sources
people
can do their homework
i
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that time which they have free time. For
introvert
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introverts
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online
education
its
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is
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advantage
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,because they should not see
a
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peole
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people
which
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they do not know and say
their
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they
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presentasion
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present
in
comfort
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their comfort
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area.
Moreover
,Nowadays
internet
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and educational
sources
for
educating
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more
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popular than other types.
Moreover
, being study to be stressed.
on the other hand
,
people
think that
on
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online
education
they do not learn enough information and
fall
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fail
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an exam or they can not feel that feeling in study.
they
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think that in online
education
you can not
do
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practice with
people
and you can remember it. For
this
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these
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people
other
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type of
education
is comfort.
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this
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this person
these people
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people
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are extrovert
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extrovert
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extroverts
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or
people
who do not shy first
meets
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meet
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. to
concluse
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conclude
educating themselves with online educational
soures
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sources
better experience and more
opportinutes
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opportunities
.Meanwhile,they can
also
learn
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other
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others
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and find new
friend
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friends
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in
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apply
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online
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Structuring
Ensure to maintain a more structured approach in your writing. Begin with a clear introduction, followed by well-organized body paragraphs, each focusing on a single main point, and conclude with a summarization of your ideas.
Accuracy
Try to minimize grammatical and spelling errors for a clearer presentation of your ideas. This helps in making your argument more comprehensible and effective.
Specificity
Provide relevant examples to support your points. For instance, mention real-life scenarios where online education has benefited individuals or discuss studies that highlight the effectiveness of online learning.
Balanced Viewpoint
The essay acknowledges both the advantages and disadvantages of online educational sources, providing a balanced perspective.
Deep Analysis
You correctly identify and attempt to address the multifaceted nature of online education concerning introverts and extroverts, analyzing aspects beyond mere content delivery.

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