You should spend about 40 min on this task. Write about the following topic: More people are aducating themselves with online educational sources. Do the advantages overweigh the disadvantages.

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Nowadays education is the main important forcing factor of
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of the world.So in
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knowledge
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technology
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society.Most people believe that
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online educational system is more suitable for them.In
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I will illustrate the main benefits and negative effects of learning from digital type of sources.On the one hand,is that educating yourself online can provide positive changes in
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area.
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we know plenty number of wood
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to produce one
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also
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many people use
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in their own aims as worksheets and as books.Those products
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to
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of numerous forests which
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enviromental
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environmental
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.Improving
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type of educational source can prevent
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problems with less
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of books and
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other kinds
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of
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source.
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a scientist
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scientist
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scientists
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in South Korea
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that using laptops in school
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of
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equipments
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,
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increases the rate of fresh air and decreases the number of waste products.
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learning
online has another positive side which
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with
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attending online
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courses
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really difficult to reach somewhere
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you
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essential
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some
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source
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like books.Doing
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things online you just can save
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your
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prove that having
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inline
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online
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teacher and looking
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the
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information
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google
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is much better than
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your
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transportation.
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while
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many people
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conclusion
Make sure to fully develop your conclusion sentence to provide a summary of the key points and state your clear opinion on whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
logical structure
Work on the logical structure by ensuring each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next, enhancing the overall flow of your essay.
introduction
The introduction clearly states the topic and outlines what will be covered in the essay, setting a clear direction from the start.
examples
Relevant examples, such as the one from South Korea, effectively support your points about environmental benefits and time-saving advantages.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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