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The chart below shows the proportions of the world's oil resource held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportions of the world's oil resource held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the figure
of
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for
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 the
world
 's
oil
 supply retained in various nations,
as well as
with
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apply
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the percentages used yearly in
the
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similar countries
Overall
,
it is clear that
Middle
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the Middle
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 East stands out as the largest
oil
 manufacturer since it accounts for almost more than half of the
world
's total supply.
Also
 evident is that the
oil
 spending
figure
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 of Asia and
United
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the United
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 States are relatively close, which makes them the two countries with the highest consumption
figure
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 worldwide. Looking at the graph more closely, one can see that Australia and New Zealand have the lowest data
in
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 supply and
demands
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demand
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. The second largest
oil
 producer
is
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in
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 Canada, which holds nearly 15
percent
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per cent
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 of the
world
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world's
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 stock.Middle East, Central and South America and Eastern Europe display some similarities in
oil
 usage with more than 6 percent for each region. The third largest
oil
 utilizer is Western Europe, which takes around
one-fith
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one-fifth
 of the
world
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world's
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 demands.
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