It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports or musician. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

It is commonly belief that some people are born with
skills
and others are not born with them. There is
also
an argument that, sometimes kids can learn
skills
they want.
This
essay will discuss both these views and express my opinion. On the one hand, there are many kids born with
talents
but their parents do not discover them. In
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, some parents do not fully exploit their children’s strengths and the result is these
talents
eventually die
due to
their neglect.
In addition
, kids should practice their
talents
because if they do not practice they will forget their abilities.
for example
, in ballet dancing, if you do not practice it every day, it is natural that your body will become lazy and not as flexible as before.
On the other hand
, people who learn
talents
sometimes have features better than those they were born with
talents
. It is possible to say that, people can choose favorite hobbies that they want to learn even after they grow up.
Moreover
, if you choose something you
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in you are absolutely creative with it.
For instance
, I remember my parents brought a personal trainer to teach me drawing and today I’m a professional in drawing. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
this
question.
However
, In my perspective, learning
skills
are greater because we can choose wherever we want and excel in these
skills
better than those who were born with them
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