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The graph below shows the nomer of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the nomer of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
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The line graph illustrates the amount of shops which were shut down
as well as
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 opened in a particular country within 7 years, beginning with 2011.
Overall
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, both
of
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rates for closing and opening of shops experienced fluctuations.
In addition
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, they had
also
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decreases
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 within the given period. In 2011,
although
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 the amount of openings topped
to
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the list with about 8,500, it gradually declined to 4,000 in 2012.
In contrast
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, approximately 6,400
stores
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 were closed and these numbers slightly dropped to 6,000 in 2012
Moreover
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, in 2013, the number of
stores
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 that were closed noticeably grew to slightly more than 7,000, a year later, it again decreased by about 300.
However
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, opened
stores
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 rose by 1,000 in 2014 from 5,000 in 2013. In the year 2015, closures in
stores
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 dramatically dipped to a bit less
from
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than
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 1,000, but these numbers showed
increase
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an increase
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 to more than 5,000 in 2016, as the same appearance of it declined. In the meantime,
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the avaliablity
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avaliablity
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availability
 of the new shops went down to 4,000 and
this
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 rate remained till 2016. After a year, it changed a little and reached about 4,050 and again dropped to 3,000 by the end of the period.
Furthermore
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, in 2018,
regarding
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the
amount
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 of markets that were shut down reached a little more than 5,000 from 5,000 in 2017.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stores with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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