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The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table shows how many mobile phones sold in millions for the period from 2006 to 2012. From the
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 we can see the difference in
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, which depends on the companies. As we can see Nokia had the highest
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 in 2006. But its
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 fluctuated
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all
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time
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 and fell down over
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. Samsung’s
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 increased steadily. Apple’s
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 increased rapidly, from the
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 it entered the market in 2007. Ericson and Motorola as we can see had only declines in their
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. In 2006 Nokia led the market with 345
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sales
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. Motorola with 210
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, Samsung with 117
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 and Ericson with 74
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sales
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. In 2007 Apple started with just 2.3
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 phones sold. Nokia reached the highest level of
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 at 475
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 in 2008
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 but
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 declined to 335
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 in 2012. Samsung's
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 grew for all the
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 from 117
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 2006 to 396.5
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 2012 ma

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, time, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "declines" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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