You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The table represents the phone
sales
in millions for
a
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the
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period
between 2006 and 2012.
Overall
, there is a noticeable increase in
total
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a total
the total
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number of
sales
and
also
several downward trends
between
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during
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the
period
.
For instance
, the most significant decrease in numbers was the Motorola brand. The number of
sales
dropped over the whole
period
. The main decline was from 2008 to 2009. The
sales
fell sharply by almost 2 times. Quite the same downward trend
has
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as
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Ericsson
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the Ericsson
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brand, but there are some differences. The
sales
of the brand reached a peak in 2007. After
that
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that,
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there was a stable decline in numbers. There are noticeable upward patterns in Samsung and Apple
sales
. In the first year (2007) Apple
sales
were only 2.3 million, but after 6 years, in 2012 the number was a sharp rise to 135.8 million. Samsung has quite the same trend. Between the
period
of 7 years, from 2006 to 2012, the numbers of
sales
grew steadily.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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