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The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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THE TWO MAPS ILLUSTRATE THE LAYOUT OF A
BOOKSTORE
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 IN 2000 AND PRESENT.
OVERALL
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

,
IT IS CLEAR THAT
Linking Words

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 THE
BOOKSTORE
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 HAS CHANGED WITH THE ADDITION OF SEVERAL NEW FACILITIES, AND THE MOST SIGNIFICANT ONE IS CONSTRUCTION OF CAFE. LOOKING INTO MORE DETAILS, TO THE WEST SIDE OF
A
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THE

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BOOKSTORE
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 AN ENTRANCE HAS KEPT ITS ORIGINAL PLACE WHICH IS ADJACENT TO
BUILDING
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THE BUILDING

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. THERE WAS NO
ANY
Correct quantifier usage
apply

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ALTERATION IN TRAVEL, NEW BOOKS, AND SERVICE DESK SECTIONS. THERE USED TO BE TWO FICTION SECTIONS IN 2000. TURNING TO THE NOTABLE DEVELOPMENTS, IN 2000 THERE WERE THREE SECTIONS IN THE HEART OF THE
BOOKSTORE
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 INCLUDING, HOBBIES, ART AND COOKING, THEY RELOCATED TO
TOP
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THE TOP

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 OF THE
BOOKSTORE
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 AND THE LONG FICTION AREAS
DOWNSIZED
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WERE DOWNSIZED

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 IN ORDER TO MAKE SPACE FOR THESE NEW FACILITIES. THERE USED TO BE ANOTHER FICTION IN THE NORTH CORNER OF
Use synonyms

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BOOKSTORE
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THE BOOKSTORE

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 IT HAS BEEN CONVERTED INTO
NON-FICTION
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A NON-FICTION

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 SECTION.ONE MAJOR TRANSFORMATION IS
ADDITION
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THE ADDITION

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 OF
CAFE
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A CAFE

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TO
Change preposition
WITH AT

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 THE BOTTOM OF
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Use synonyms
BOOKSTORE
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THE BOOKSTORE

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 WITH THREE TABLES AREA.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bookstore with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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