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The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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THE TWO MAPS ILLUSTRATE THE LAYOUT OF A
BOOKSTORE
 IN 2000 AND PRESENT.
OVERALL
,
IT IS CLEAR THAT
 THE
BOOKSTORE
 HAS CHANGED WITH THE ADDITION OF SEVERAL NEW FACILITIES, AND THE MOST SIGNIFICANT ONE IS CONSTRUCTION OF CAFE. LOOKING INTO MORE DETAILS, TO THE WEST SIDE OF
A
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THE
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BOOKSTORE
 AN ENTRANCE HAS KEPT ITS ORIGINAL PLACE WHICH IS ADJACENT TO
BUILDING
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THE BUILDING
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. THERE WAS NO
ANY
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apply
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ALTERATION IN TRAVEL, NEW BOOKS, AND SERVICE DESK SECTIONS. THERE USED TO BE TWO FICTION SECTIONS IN 2000. TURNING TO THE NOTABLE DEVELOPMENTS, IN 2000 THERE WERE THREE SECTIONS IN THE HEART OF THE
BOOKSTORE
 INCLUDING, HOBBIES, ART AND COOKING, THEY RELOCATED TO
TOP
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THE TOP
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 OF THE
BOOKSTORE
 AND THE LONG FICTION AREAS
DOWNSIZED
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WERE DOWNSIZED
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 IN ORDER TO MAKE SPACE FOR THESE NEW FACILITIES. THERE USED TO BE ANOTHER FICTION IN THE NORTH CORNER OF
BOOKSTORE
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THE BOOKSTORE
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 IT HAS BEEN CONVERTED INTO
NON-FICTION
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A NON-FICTION
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 SECTION.ONE MAJOR TRANSFORMATION IS
ADDITION
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THE ADDITION
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 OF
CAFE
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A CAFE
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TO
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WITH AT
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 THE BOTTOM OF
BOOKSTORE
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THE BOOKSTORE
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 WITH THREE TABLES AREA.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bookstore with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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