The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.

The map depicts a harbour in 2000 and how it looks

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now.

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it is clear that

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the harbour changed significantly throughout the decades, and seven new features can be found in the second plan. The main areas affected by change are

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the port

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and the new establishments made to welcome visitors and attract tourists. Looking at the map in more detail, we can see that a second dock was built to welcome more passenger ferries.

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, the marina port that used to contain private yachts has been moved to where the fishing boats would stay; showers and toilets have been installed between both car parks.

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the new improvements discussed above, the harbour has

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seen other

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regarding the renovated disused castle that became a hotel.

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ancient castle got to have its own beach, making the public one in 2000 private.

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, cafes and shops were built along the port’s shore

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the car park that was connected to the road that led to the lifeboat was made accessible directly from the main road.

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Structure/Organization

Try to put changes in clear order. Use words like first, next, then to show what changed.

Task Response

Add a short end that sums up what you see now and how it is different.

Language

Check word choice. 'looks like now' is better as 'looks now'. 'throughout the decades' can be 'over time or in 2000 and today'.

Clarity

Some ideas could be clearer. Put ideas about the port and places for visitors in one part of the text.

Strength

The overview shows a big change in the harbour.

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The essay gives many details about what changed.

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Link words help the flow between parts.

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Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

180 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

multi-purpose building
recreational facilities
maritime safety
leisure destination
tourism-focused
infrastructure improvements
pedestrian promenade
landmark
expanded roads
transport infrastructure
industrial use
cruise ship terminal

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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.

Fully explain your ideas

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In the last century, the America lost 17% of their B-52 bomber planes in Vietnam. What are causes? Is this positive or negative?

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