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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sportsperson or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is the view of some
people
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 that individuals who have talents in certain areas
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 as
sports
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 or
music
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 are born with it,
while
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 others believe that a child can learn to be good at these
skills
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.
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people
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 are indeed talented in these fields because they can achieve great feats with no training or with minimal effort, I believe that any child can learn to become good at certain
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 if they work hard.
People
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 who are naturally talented at
sports
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 or
music
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 can perform excellently well in these areas without training. Some
people
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 who perform very well in
sports
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 or
music
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 do not need to learn or practice to become proficient at these
skills
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 because it comes naturally to them, unlike others who have to train for a long time to reach the same level.
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, Michael Jackson, a musical legend, is widely known to be talented in singing and dancing because he displayed these
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 from childhood without training.
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, I believe that even those who are talented in certain fields need to learn and practice to perform at maximum capacity. Children can be taught to become good sportsmen and women and outstanding musicians if they work hard at it. It is possible to teach someone different
skills
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, especially a young child, because they learn faster and with practice they too can become very good at
music
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 and
sports
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.
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, Dwayne Johnson, popularly known as the Rock, was taught how to wrestle from an early age and now holds many wrestling titles.
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 reason, I believe that children can learn to be good at these
skills
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 by working hard even if they were not born with
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 talents. In conclusion, even though some
people
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 can perform well in
sports
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 or
music
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 because they are talented, I believe that young
people
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 who are not talented can learn to be skilled at
sports
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 or
music
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 if they work hard.
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task achievement
Ensure that all points in the essay are fully developed with specific examples and explanations. Consider offering deeper insights or counterarguments to strengthen your position.
coherence cohesion
Enhance logical flow by ensuring smooth transitions between ideas and paragraphs. Using linking words or phrases can help maintain better cohesion throughout the text.
introduction conclusion
The introduction clearly outlines the topic and presents a balanced discussion of the two viewpoints.
introduction conclusion
The conclusion effectively summarizes your opinion and the argument presented in the essay.
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