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Afriend you made while travelling abroad has written to ask you for advice about doing language classes in your area. You know about local language school that might be suitable for him tell your friend about the language school Say why you think the language school would be suitable for him explain how to apply for the language school

#afriend #advice #language #classes #area #school #friend
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Hey Kiran I hope you are doing great . I am thrilled to know that you are coming to Canada
with in
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 next six months. Toronto
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 as
city
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a city
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 of business so
i
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 am sure that you will get the opportunity for your career development. As per your saying , you want to attend language
school
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 in order to improve your communication skills so
i
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 asked my some of friends about
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 and they suggested
me
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"The
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school
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 of
learns
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what
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i
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this
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would be suitable for you. I checked online about the
school
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 that
i
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 mentioned it has good
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 on
google
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Google
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 5
star
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,
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 as
english
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 is your second language
so
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apply
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this
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school
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 has
special
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 course for those who are not native in the language but want to learn and
fee
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a fee
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 of the course is
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 less as compare to other schools. In order to get enrolled in
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school
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 one must
have to
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fill
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 admission form
prior
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one month
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to begin
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of
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their courses. All the fee needs to be paid in advance and there is no refund of it if you cancel the plan to join your course. Let me know if you need any
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 information. Your
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sincerely
 Amar
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single idea per paragraph
Try to break down complex ideas into single paragraphs to enhance readability.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is friendly and supportive, which suits the purpose well.
complete response
The response is mostly complete and addresses the necessary points about the language school.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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