The impact that growing demand for more flights has had on the environment is a major concern for many countries. Some people believe that one way to limit the number of people traveling by air is to increase taxes on flights. To what extent do you think this could solve the problem?

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debate that
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from
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is deteriorating the environment, in order to, tackle
this
issue one of the proposed measures is to increase the taxes on buying plane tickets
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so that commuters start avoiding
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measure would help to some extent only and reasons to support my stance are elaborated in the following paragraphs. As a solution, we must focus on developing new technologies, which could help to ameliorate the pollution caused by
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aeroplanes.
To begin
with, people find air travel convenient and
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, it is a
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fact that an individual can travel up to far distances in a short span of
time
and in a relaxed manner.
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,
according to
a survey, about 25 per cent of the passengers prefer to use flights, because it saves their
time
and offers convenience.
Thus
, it is less likely to happen that people will stop using planes even after an increase in fares. Adding more to it, the lucrative offers given by airlines will keep on attracting customers. As a matter of fact, it has been seen that air companies in order to, attract more people give away discounts on tickets, which
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more commuters to use
this
mode of transportation. To illustrate,
last
year, during the Christmas week, the Virgin Atlantic Airline offered a 40 per cent discount on their tickets, which attracted a record number of passengers.
Therefore
, just by imposing more taxes on flights alone will not be able to solve the pollution issue. As a possible solution to the issue, authorities could look
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the Research and Development of new engine types, which has
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carbon-footprints
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or
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water as a by-product like
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Hydrogen Engines.
To sum up
, undoubtedly, the earth's environment is deteriorating
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, but
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increasing taxes on flights cannot stop passengers
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using
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, because it is convenient to use and it saves
time
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developing innovative technologies, which could reduce
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pollution.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • economic activity
  • sustainable aviation technologies
  • alternative forms of transportation
  • sustainable travel behaviors
  • financial disincentives
  • public awareness campaigns
  • tourism-based economies
  • social equity
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