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Writing task 1: Bar chart The chart shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

Writing task 1: Bar chart The chart shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.
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The bar chart illustrates the amount of
money
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 spent on 5 consumer goods (cars, computers, books, perfume and cameras) in
France
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 and the
UK
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 in 2010. Units are measured in
pounds
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 sterling.
Overall
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, the expenditure of the
UK
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 was higher than that of
France
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. Both the French and the British spent the most
money
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 on cars,
while
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 in the
UK
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 the least amount of
money
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 was spent on perfume compared to cameras in
France
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. When it comes to the total expenditure in the
UK
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 on cars it was estimated to be around 450,000
pounds
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, compared to
a
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400,000
pounds
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 spent by
France
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. The French invested approximately 150,000
pounds
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 in perfume, as opposed to a mere 100,000
pounds
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 spent by the British.
On the contrary
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, the
UK
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 had far bigger expenses in the camera sector than
France
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 (roughly 350,000
pounds
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 and 100,000
pounds
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 consecutively) In terms of computers, the investment provided by the French was slightly bigger than the one given by the British (about 400,000
pounds
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 and 350,000 respectively.
In
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contrast
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 the
UK
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 spent more
money
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 (400,000
pounds
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) on books in comparison to
France
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 (300,000)
pounds
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, france, uk, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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