The diagram below shows the process of canning of fish. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the process below.

The diagram below shows the process of canning of fish. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the process below.
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The given picture illustrates the process of canning
of
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fish
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. It is manifest from the flow chart that 15 steps are involved from the initial catching to the final dispatch to supermarkets.
First,
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the
fish
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are caught and
then
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frozen and stored in the next step.
Then
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they are unloaded and weighed before
thawed
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being thawed
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. After thawing, they are cut into big pieces and
then
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are
steam cooked
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steam-cooked
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. After cooking, these are cooled and
then
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these are filleted or cut into small pieces.
Then
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these pieces are canned. Brine, water or oil is added
in
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the cans. In the next
step
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the cans are sealed and
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heated for sterilization.
Then
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, stamping or labelling of the cans is done before storing them for final dispatch to
super markets
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supermarkets
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for sale.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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canning
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the canning
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of
fish
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is a lengthy and tedious process involving many steps. Each step is very important to retain the freshness of the
fish
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and to make it consumable for a long time.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words fish with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • canning process
  • processing plant
  • impurities
  • sorting
  • gutting
  • internal organs
  • cooking process
  • precise temperature
  • preservatives
  • sealing process
  • contaminants
  • preservation
  • sterilization
  • spoilage
  • labeling
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • retailers
  • consumers
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