Some people think computers and the Internet are important in children's study, but others think students can learn more effectively in schools and with teachers. Discus both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own I knowledge or experience.
The past 50 years have seen a dramatic increase in the popularity of computers and the Internet in the process of learning.
While
some may laud its convenience, others argue that learning in schools
with tutors is more efficient. In this
essay, I intend to discuss both these perspectives and give my own opinion.
First of all, it is an irrefutable fact that technology has facilitated the process of learning. Prevailing the utilization of electronic gadgets as well as
the internet in the process of education
has made attending schools
or educational institutions redundant, resulting in saving time and energy for learners. For instance
, in a research conducted in several schools
in Tehran, students admitted that in the pandemic of Covid 19 and prevailing remote education
, 2 hours were saved for them during weekdays. Additionally
, removing the commute between home and school diminishes air and noise pollution, resulting in ecological improvement. So, promoting online education
is beneficial for both humans and the environment.
Nonetheless
, I believe that face-to-face education
with teachers’ supervision could not be instituted by online education
. Attending schools
, exposing to an educational question-answer atmosphere and communicating with peers could be accompanied by more competition and encouragement to study more. According to
the statistics published by the World Education
Organization in 2020, using online education
during the coronavirus contributed to an exponential decline in students’ grades especially in mathematics and physics. So, rather than underestimating the benefits of going to school, more emphasis should be put on conventional methods which are sometimes the most effective ones.
By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that although
attending school may be accompanied by some inconvenience, its merits far surpass online education
. Furthermore
, equipping public transport by governments could facilitate the transportation challenges to students.Submitted by golriiz.azizi1991 on
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task achievement
Make sure to balance the length of the paragraphs about each view. The first paragraph seems slightly more developed than the second, which can affect the perceived balance in discussion.
task achievement
Try to provide more varied examples to support each point, enhancing the essay's credibility and informative value.
coherence cohesion
Avoid using overly complex structures at the expense of clarity. Sentences should be concise and clear to improve overall understanding.
coherence cohesion
Ensure smooth transition between ideas, particularly when shifting from arguments in favor of online learning to those about in-person education.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs for each view, and a conclusion.
task achievement
You have included relevant examples to support your arguments and provided a well-rounded discussion of both views.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the writer's position and ties the essay together.