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One of your friends recently had a birthday celebration, but you missed it and, you forgot to tell your friend that you couldnt attend.

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Dear Joxa, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I'm so sorry that I missed your birthday party
this
 weekend - it was completely unintentional and I feel terrible about it. As your friend, missing
such
 an important event was inexcusable. You see,
last
 week was incredibly busy for me. Between finishing assignments for my writing courses and starting a new part-time job, I barely had a moment to myself. In all the chaos, your birthday celebration must have slipped my mind. It wasn't until Sunday that my girlfriend mentioned the party and I realized, that I had never given you a call. I can't express how disappointed I am in myself. You always make time for your friends, even when life gets hectic. I should have done the same. Please know that forgetting was not because your birthday isn't important to me - it just shows how scattered my head has been lately. I hope you'll accept my sincere apology. To make it up to you, how about I treat you to lunch
this
 weekend so we can catch up? We'll grab your
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 dishes and you can tell me all about your special day. And I promise, next year your party will be the only thing on my calendar for weeks beforehand. You're one of my best friends, Joxa. Thank you for understanding, and I hope you can forgive my mistake. Please let me know about lunch - I owe you, big time. Your friend, Mr Bear
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Task Achievement
Ensure that your letter addresses all parts of the prompt. It seems that you've missed out on explaining why you didn't inform your friend beforehand. Including this point would strengthen your task achievement score.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to use a variety of cohesive devices to link your ideas more clearly throughout your letter. This could include not only connecting words but also referencing and substitution, which could enhance the flow of ideas.
Task Achievement
It is good to personalize the writing, but make sure every addition contributes to the main purpose of the letter. Stay focused on directly addressing the issues raised by the task prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion
Include a clear closing statement or an expression of hope that the issue can be resolved. This can neatly wrap up the letter and give it a sense of completeness.

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