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The bar chart shows informationa bout salt intake in the US in 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows informationa bout salt intake in the US in 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the
amount
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 of
salt
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 being consumed by males and females in the United
State
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 in the year 2000.
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, it can be seen that men have higher
salt
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 consumption compared to
women
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. Except
from
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 children under 6 and
women
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 over 60 years old, people consumed much more
salt
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 than the recommended
amount
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 in the US.
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 with, children under the age of 6 consumed the least
amount
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 of
salt
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, much lower than the recommended intake, by roughly 2000
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miligrams
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milligrams
 and 1250
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miligrams
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milligrams
, boys and girls respectively. These numbers are almost
as
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half of the consumption of
which
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adults aged 20 to 39, with men having the highest intake of 4500
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miligrams
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milligrams
 and
women
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 approximately 3125
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miligrams
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milligrams
, far exceeding the recommended
adults
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adult
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salt
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 intake of 2500
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miligrams
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milligrams
 in the US For the remaining figures, boys
aging
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 6 to 11 consumed the same
amount
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 as men over 60 years old. Males from 12-19 and 40-60 consumed the same
amount
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 of
salt
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 by 4125
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miligrams
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milligrams
.
For females
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Females
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, from the
age
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ages
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 of 6-11, 12-19, and 40-60 had the same consumption of roughly 3000
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miligrams
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milligrams
. At the same time,
women
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 over the age of 60 consumed the exact
amount
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 of 2500
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miligrams
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milligrams
 of
salt
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 recommended for adults in the US.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, salt, women, miligrams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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