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The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Mon, 2nd Dec

The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Mon, 2nd Dec
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The graph depicts the number of clothing
exports
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 between 1999 and 2003 in three countries.
Overall
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, clothing
exports
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 in
Japan
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 and
Colombia
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 showed very slight fluctuations,
while
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 Myanmar’s
exports
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 were quite volatile over the five-year period. In 1999, Myanmar exported apparel approximately $20,000,000, compared to about $450,000,000 for
Colombia
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 and $570,000,000 for
Japan
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.
However
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, from 1999 to 2000, Myanmar apparel
exports
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 skyrocketed, surpassing those of both countries at $800,000,000.
On the other hand
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, there was a relatively small gap between
Japan
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 and
Colombia
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, sharing
almost
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 similar rate at just over $500,000,000 in 2000. Myanmar clothing
exports
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 soared beginning in 2000, reaching a peak of $920,000,000 in 2001 before dropping significantly to $350,000,000. They
then
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rebounding
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 marginally in 2003 for a final value of $400,000,000, which was the lowest figure among the three nations.
Colombia
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, which overtook
Japan
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 from 2001 to 2003, recorded the highest rate
overall
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 in 2002 and 2003 at $700,000,000 and $600,000,000, respectively.
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