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The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June

The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June
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The line graph illustrates information on applications, which were required at a tourist office in the UK during a 5-month
period
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 from
January
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 to June. Looking at
an
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the
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overall
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 structure, it is readily apparent that the number of requests experienced an increase for all sections, with the exception of those made by letter/email, which declined steadily. In the preliminary part of the
period
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, requests made by telephone were observed as the most important indication, which reversed the position
with
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of
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 the in-person sector during the ultimate stages of the
period
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. The
quantity
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number
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 of requests made by telephone, which accounted for approximately 900 in
January
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, increased slightly to 1000 in both March and April and
then
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 rose significantly to 1600 by June, marking a notable upward trend. As for the figure for another component, which was called in person, it constituted roughly 450 in
January
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.
This
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 figure increased consistently, equaling about 800 in the average timeframe, and
then
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 underwent a rapid surge to nearly 1900 by June. In terms of by letter/email,
although
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 the sum in
January
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 was close to 800, it declined steadily over the months, and the final count was about 400, representing a significant drop over the given
period
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, january with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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