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In the future, nobody wiil buy printed newspapers because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion.

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is claims
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 that in the years coming, there
would
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will
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 be no paper-based source of information
such
 as
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and
book
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books
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 and they
would
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will
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 lose their readers
due to
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the availabilty
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availabilty
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availability
 of
Internet
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the Internet
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 and free access to them.
Eventhough
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Even though
 I believe there still would be
people
 who prefer to feel the heaviness of a book in their hands or even the smell of
papers
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paper
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, I think more and more
people
 tend to use the online
materil
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material
 to get information. On the one hand, it would be
exteremly
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extremely
 fast to find
news
 online. One of the
perk
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 of online sources is that most
people
 can search easily and detect
the
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fake
news
 with a few clicks,
also
 the emergency
news
 would be spread really fast all around the world.
On the other hand
, it is more convenient to buy
the
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reading material
such
 as e-books or journals,
in
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at
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cheaper
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a cheaper
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 price due
the
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 lack of production process and
therefore
 read them anywhere or anytime.
Furthermore
, using online sources is more
environmental
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environmentally
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 friendly. Because with the availability of e-books and online
news
,
less
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fewer
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 and
less tree
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fewer trees
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 would be cut down
for producing
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to produce
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papars
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papers
 and making hardcopy,
thus
, deforesting would not be the main concern in the next era. It goes without saying that one of the other
advantage
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advantages
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 of
the
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online materials,
the
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 ability to access
to
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them anytime without the fear of
they lose
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losing
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 their qualities, since the words were typed on
website
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a website
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, not printed on
papers
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paper
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 which would fade away after a few years. In
conclution
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conclusion
,
eventhough
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even though
 there is no denying the feeling of reading a book in our hands,
due to
above
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 reasons, I believe paper-based source information would have less audience among
people
 and they would be more
interest
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 in online and
free of charge of
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free-of-charge
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news
 and ebooks.
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