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The table gives information about five types of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010,2012 and 2014

The table gives information about five types of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010,2012 and 2014
The table shows
registered
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the registered
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 types of
vehicles
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 in
Australia
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 between 2010 and 2014
Overall
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, five types of
vehicles
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 experienced different trends in five years
for example
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, passenger
vehicles
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 registered the most
while
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 light trucks
was
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were
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 the lowest As the table shows,
Firstly
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 in 2010 11,800,000 passenger
vehicles
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registered
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were registered
show examples
 in
Australia
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 and 12,700,000 in 2012. In 2014 13,000,000 cars
registered
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were registered
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 and the
change
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 in the years between 2010 and 2014 was +10,2%.
Next
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The next
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 one is commercial
vehicles
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,
it
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which
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 started at 2,300,000 in 2010 and 2,600,000 , 2,700,000 in 2012 and 2014, the
overall
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change
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 is +17,4% If we move to
the
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apply
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motorcycles, in 2010 540,000
of
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apply
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motorbikes registered
to
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in
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Australia
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 in 2012 and 2014 680,000 and 709,000, motorbikes brought to
Australia
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 and the
change
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 is 30,8%.
Next
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The next
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 one heavy trucks
was
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were
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 384,000. 390,000. 416,000 registered in the years of 2010,2012,2014
overall
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change
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 is +8,3%, the
last
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 one is light trucks, beginning was 106,000 in 2010 and it didn't
change
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 much in 2012,
124,000
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with 124,000
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 and in 2014 131,000 cars
brought
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were brought
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 and registered to
Australia
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 and the
overall
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 percentage is +23,5%

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vehicles, australia, change with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • trends
  • registration
  • vehicles
  • comparison
  • categories
  • growth
  • decline
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • surge
  • consistent
  • pattern
  • speculate
  • factors
  • economic conditions
  • consumer preferences
  • advancements
  • technology
  • implications
  • infrastructure
  • environment
  • societal behaviors
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