it is important for peole to take risks, Both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

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, many opportunities come with risks and

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as well. I think people need to be brave enough to face the risks because it will have a big impact on them and many advantages will come.

On the other hand

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Task Achievement

Ensure that you address both the advantages and disadvantages clearly, providing a more balanced viewpoint for a complete response.

Task Achievement

Expand on your points by providing specific examples or scenarios that exhibit the risks and their outcomes, making your arguments more compelling and relatable.

Coherence and Cohesion

Do ensure your essay follows a consistent logical structure. Introduce each point separately and consider using separate paragraphs for advantages and disadvantages.

Coherence and Cohesion

Provide a conclusion that summarizes the main points and clearly states your position to provide closure to your essay.

Task Achievement

You have a clear and engaging introduction that introduces the topic effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion

The essay beginnings show a positive start with an interesting viewpoint.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

51 words

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it is important for peole to take risks, Both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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expressing my deep love for them and gratitude for the moments we've shared