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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Most countries aim to improve their standard of living through economic development, but many important social values can be lost as a result. Do the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages? You should write at least 250 words.

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A lot of
countries
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 worldwide target to improve life by improving the economy,
However
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, Social
values
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 could be impaired or lost
due to
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this
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 way of
improvement
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 In my opinion, the advantages of Economic
development
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 outweigh the disadvantages
To begin
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 with, One of the advantages of economic
improvement
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 is the
development
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 of manufacturing, so the
country
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 can export a lot of its goods to other nations and cities worldwide which will affect the
country
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 positively by increasing the income
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the
country
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 and that will affect grossly the level of the worker's financial income.
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, Some
countries
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 in the Middle East are famous for manufacturing cotton and exporting a lot of synthesized cotton worldwide, making these
countries
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 pioneers in cotton production with a huge
improvement
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 in economic life. Another advantage is the positive effect on the evolution of other aspects of a
country
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's
development
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,
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, economic
improvement
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 will affect the growth of other sectors like health, education, housing,
On the other hand
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, the disadvantage of economic
development
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 is the impairment and loss of social
values
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.In fact, the benefit of economic change outweighs the negative effect on social
values
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. When we compare the developing
countries
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in contrast
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 to the underdeveloped
countries
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, we can see how much the minimal effects on social
values
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 in the developed
countries
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 are not significant in return
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 the huge
improvement
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 in economics. In conclusion, nations have to cope with the globe's economic evolution and
development
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 to preserve current and future better lives for their society.
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Expand on the advantages and disadvantages with more specific examples and analysis to strengthen the argument.
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Ensure that each main point in the essay is fully developed with supporting details or examples.
coherence cohesion
Make sure that paragraphs have clear connections to each other, guiding the reader smoothly from one point to the next.
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The essay addresses the prompt thoroughly and presents a clear opinion on the topic.
coherence cohesion
Logical structure is maintained throughout the essay, with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
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The essay shows a good understanding of the topic by discussing both advantages and disadvantages of economic development.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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