In many countries, formal exams are used to assess students’ abilities and to judge the success of their education. What are the advantages and disadvantages of using formal exams to assess students’ abilities? Do you think the benefits of using formal exams outweigh the drawbacks?

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It is argued in many countries around the world that evaluation of
students
' potential does not determine their educational success by their performance in
exams
. I think the disadvantages are more than
advantages
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because
exams
only not a reliable method to evaluate
students
, and there are many factors that could shape their future despite their academic level.
Initially
, testing learners gives a general idea about their academic educational path. It is solely concerning an academic part. It does not engage their weaknesses nor their strength, which figures their future as well. By knowing their interest and their talent, it could be helpful more than
exams
.
For example
, some
students
are talented in math, so
this
could lead to being engineers. Sometimes relying on
exams
only could be unfair because the result appears by human beings.
Moreover
, sometimes
students
fail to obtain a good mark
due to
some situation like illness and some mistakes during the collection of
exams
.
For instance
,
in
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years ago during
domination
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the domination
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of White American citizens, some teachers
were
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criticized their
students
or gave them lower marks
below
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what
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they
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because of racism. Assessment of
students
’ capability by depending on
exams
only has drawbacks no more than the benefits.
Exams
do not assess learners'
personality
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personalities
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, which is more vital
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their educational success and their professional career path after graduation.
For example
,
due to
lower degrees in secondary schools, some graduated learners tend to choose
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college, as noticed most
of
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influencers
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the influencers
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have become famous and
influent
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in their communities,
although
some of them may be leaders in their countries.
Additionally
, some businessmen who discontinued their studies,
they
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become rich and own successful companies. Conclusion: In conclusion, in my perspective
exams
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only
tool
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to predict
students
’ academic success,
it
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they
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depends
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on many factors that
exams
consider as subjective manner. I think their personality and preferences may be much
beneficial
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more beneficial
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than
exams
alone.
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