The graph below shows the hospital admissions for five hospitals in a European country from 2004 to 2008

The graph below shows the hospital admissions for five hospitals in a European country from 2004 to 2008
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The line graph illustrates the number of weekly
admissions
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in five different hospitals, namely Fortsmith, Adlin, Stanton, Bardley and Oxley, located in European countries between 2004 and 2018.
Overall
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,
while
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the statistic of Bardley
admissions
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experienced the highest weekly
admissions
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, over 250 in 2018, the lowest figure was seen in Oxley’s statistics in the same year. It is obvious that all hospital
admissions
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except Oxley have increased
at the end
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of the period.
Firstly
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, the number of Bardley started weekly 200
admissions
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in 2004 and became higher than 250 after 14 years.
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the hospital of Adlin’s weekly entries were relatively fluctuating until 2010, it rose steadily and obtained over 100 weekly
admissions
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during that period.
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, the trends of Stanton’s
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started between 50 and 100 but during 14 years it increased to approximately 150.
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, the number of fortsmiths gradually increased between 2004 and 2010.
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it started to decline after 2014, it was still higher than in 2004. Oxley, the hospital with declining
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became approximately 100 intakes in 2018 despite its performance in 2004.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
Vocabulary: Replace the words admissions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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