The bar chart provided information about the drinking habits of USA people by age. Summarize the informationa nd by selecting and reporting the main feature.

The bar chart provided information about the drinking habits of USA people by age. Summarize the informationa nd by selecting and reporting the main feature.
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The given bar chart illustrates the information about the drinking habits of the citizens of the USA by their
age
.
Overall
, the majority of the population in the USA never drinks,
while
some
people
after a specific
age
leave their drinking habits. A considerable number of
people
are light
drinkers
,
while
the least number of
people
are heavy
drinkers
. In the USA, approximately 60 % of
people
aged 16-24 years and never
drinkers
. At their
age
35 to 44, around 60% of
people
are never
drinkers
.
However
, at the
age
of 65-74, around 45 % of
people
are never
drinkers
. Meanwhile, from the
age
of 16 to 64,
people
drink
,
however
, after the
age
of 65 to 74, around 45% to 65% of
people
become ex-
drinkers
.
Moreover
, 60% to 90%of
people
at
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age
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ages
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of 25 to 34
drink
lightly, and around 85% to 95% of 65-74 aged
people
drink
lightly. Meanwhile, at the
age
of 45 to 54, approximately 90% to 100 % of
people
drink
heavily.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, people, drinkers, drink with synonyms.
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