Government should spend money on railways than roads. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Some
people
think that
government
should spend
money
on building
railways
rather than spend
money
on
roads
.I completely disagree with the opinion that the
government
should spend
money
on
railways
. On the one hand, I accept that the
government
should spend
money
to build
railways
, there are several benefits of building
railways
.
Firstly
,
people
can
travel
faster. For a long journey,
people
should
travel
by
train
because travelling by
train
is faster than by
car
. If
people
travel
by
train
, the
train
will not stop going,
whereas
cars will stop at every traffic light and on the road there may be a traffic jam.
Secondly
, the
train
travels directly rather than cars and you will be at your destination on time .
For example
roads
for cars and
railways
in Uzbekistan. If someone wants to
travel
from Tashkent to Khiva by
car
, it would take around 14 hours to reach the destination,
however
, if
people
travel
by
train
it would take 6 hours, and
people
will save 8 hours if society
travel
by
train
. Because of
this
point, I accept that the
government
should spend
money
on
railways
.
On the other hand
, many
roads
are not perfect.Many
roads
very horrible because of potholes on the road. Because of holes in the road, there are many
car
accidents,
for example
,
last
year's statistics show that 40 per cent of
car
accidents were caused because of potholes.
Secondly
, there are more
people
who prefer to
travel
by
car
rather than by
train
, that’s why the
government
should spend more
money
on
roads
than on
railways
.All year's statistics illustrate that
people
travel
by
car
more than by
train
, and I agree with the opinion that the
government
should spend
money
on
roads
. In conclusion, I believe that the
government
should spend
money
on
roads
, and in my point of view I agree with the opinion that the
government
should use the
money
to improve
roads
.
Submitted by makemoneyizzy16 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task achievement
Ensure that your examples directly support your main arguments. While the example regarding travel time between Tashkent and Khiva is relevant, more specific data or hypothetical situations could further strengthen your point.
task achievement
Work on maintaining a neutral tone throughout the essay even if your language leans towards one opinion.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps frame your argument and sum up your position effectively.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of the essay is sound, with clear organization and progression between ideas. Each point is linked effectively.
task achievement
You've presented a balanced view by acknowledging the benefits of both railways and roads, demonstrating a comprehensive understanding of the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • environmental footprint
  • efficiency
  • pollution
  • cost-effectiveness
  • economic development
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • initial investment
  • maintenance
  • upgrades
  • rural
  • urban
  • last-mile connectivity
What to do next:
Look at other essays: