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Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today.

The maps illustrate a science
park
Use synonyms
has
Correct pronoun usage
that has
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 undergone
a
Correct article usage
apply
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development from 2008 to the
current
Correct word choice
present
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 day.
Overall
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, the maps clearly show that the
park
Use synonyms
 has changed, which
include
Correct subject-verb agreement
includes
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 the expansion, transformation, and addition of some facilities. In 2008, the
park
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 had offices, a reception, a business
units
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unit
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, a car
park
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, an IT center, a cyber security. Today, the reception in the northeastern
park
Use synonyms
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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adjacent to the offices has been replaced by a university hub,
Furthermore
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, a research and development building has
constructed
Add a missing verb
been constructed
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 in the west of the
officies
Correct your spelling
offices
office
,
conversely
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, changes have not
be
Wrong verb form
been
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 implemented to the northeastern business units.
Moreover
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, in the southeast of the
park
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, the
cyper
Correct your spelling
cyber
cypher
 security building has been expanded, and a station of a railway has
established
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been established
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. The IT
center
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centre
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 construction has
beem
Correct your spelling
been
 replaced by an innovation
center
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centre
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 once.
Finally
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, the additions of cycle paths beside the middle road, which are connected to the car
park
Use synonyms
 in the centre, have been conducted in the middle
park
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, and a bus station has been provided in the east.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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