Many countries have compulsory military service for young men after they leave school. It would be a good idea for all countries to adopt this system for men, and possibly for women too. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays more countries are making it an obligation for young
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to go through compulsory military service immediately after school. In
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essay, I would like to discuss the pros and cons of imposing
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idea on nationals and why I strongly agree with
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notion of why every nation should adopt
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system irrespective of gender.
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, war requires human resources and
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to be capable of defending against its enemy.
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, each nation has different population demographics and it becomes extremely important for all
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to know how to fight war with patriotism and win it.
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, South Korea a small country has made mandatory training for all young
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to serve in the army for 2 years to fight against North Korea.
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, women and children are said to be the most vulnerable in times of war.
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, the system shall implement training for males and females after the age of 18, so they will be able to protect themselves.
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, I would
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argue that young
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may lose their precious age leading to opportunity costs and physical stress.
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, training and serving army for 2 years as a youth can help at times of need but may cost one's youth by ignoring their physical needs. To summarise, I would say that compulsory army duty is good for both genders and will increase national security and safety for all nationals but would cost a person their early years, physical and mental risk.
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, it's important to find a balance and find a middle ground to implement
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idea.
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Ensure that each paragraph addresses a single main idea and logically connects to the next. This will enhance the flow of your arguments.
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Expand on your arguments with more detailed examples and explanations to fully develop your ideas.
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Consider counterarguments more thoroughly to present a well-rounded discussion.
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The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion that encapsulate your viewpoint on the topic.
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You address both sides of the argument, showing an understanding of the complexity of the issue.
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The essay contains relevant examples, like the South Korean military service, which supports your arguments.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Compulsory
  • Military service
  • Conscription
  • Patriotism
  • National security
  • Social equality
  • Discipline
  • Physical fitness
  • Life skills
  • Job training
  • Infringement
  • Conscripts
  • Gender equality
  • Mandatory
  • Economy
  • Education system
  • Labor market
  • Civil service
  • Alternative forms
  • Balanced view
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