Many countries have compulsory military service for young men after they leave school. It would be a good idea for all countries to adopt this system for men, and possibly for women too. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Nowadays more countries are making it an obligation for young
people
to go through compulsory military service immediately after school. In Use synonyms
this
essay, I would like to discuss the pros and cons of imposing Linking Words
this
idea on nationals and why I strongly agree with Linking Words
this
notion of why every nation should adopt Linking Words
this
system irrespective of gender.
Linking Words
Firstly
, war requires human resources and Linking Words
they
Correct pronoun usage
it
need
to be capable of defending against its enemy. Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
Also
, each nation has different population demographics and it becomes extremely important for all Linking Words
people
to know how to fight war with patriotism and win it. Use synonyms
For example
, South Korea a small country has made mandatory training for all young Linking Words
people
to serve in the army for 2 years to fight against North Korea.
Use synonyms
Secondly
, women and children are said to be the most vulnerable in times of war. Linking Words
Hence
, the system shall implement training for males and females after the age of 18, so they will be able to protect themselves. Linking Words
Conversely
, I would Linking Words
also
argue that young Linking Words
people
may lose their precious age leading to opportunity costs and physical stress. Use synonyms
For instance
, training and serving army for 2 years as a youth can help at times of need but may cost one's youth by ignoring their physical needs.
To summarise, I would say that compulsory army duty is good for both genders and will increase national security and safety for all nationals but would cost a person their early years, physical and mental risk. Linking Words
Hence
, it's important to find a balance and find a middle ground to implement Linking Words
this
idea.Linking Words
Submitted by mayuri_3006 on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph addresses a single main idea and logically connects to the next. This will enhance the flow of your arguments.
task achievement
Expand on your arguments with more detailed examples and explanations to fully develop your ideas.
task achievement
Consider counterarguments more thoroughly to present a well-rounded discussion.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion that encapsulate your viewpoint on the topic.
task achievement
You address both sides of the argument, showing an understanding of the complexity of the issue.
task achievement
The essay contains relevant examples, like the South Korean military service, which supports your arguments.