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The diagram below shows the life cycle of the Monarch butterfly.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of the Monarch butterfly.
The pictures below give
the
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information about the lifecycle of a butterfly. As it can be seen from the picture there are several steps of the cycle. In the first
step
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 we can see an egg. And in the
last
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picture
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 there is an adult butterfly. We can see that there is a picture of a caterpillar after the egg. So we can conclude that
caterpillar
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the caterpillar
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 comes out of the egg, and after a certain amount of
time
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 the insect passes into another phase. In the third
phase
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phase,
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 the insect becomes chrysalis.
Then
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 an adult emerges out of the chrysalis.
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 the
end
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 we can see an adult butterfly as an output of the cycle

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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